{"id":440,"date":"2011-04-14T17:45:00","date_gmt":"2011-04-14T17:45:00","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/pelicanbookgroup.com\/blog\/blog\/2011\/04\/14\/editing-tip-avoid-episodic-writing\/"},"modified":"2015-11-25T12:42:35","modified_gmt":"2015-11-25T19:42:35","slug":"editing-tip-avoid-episodic-writing","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/pelicanbookgroup.com\/blog\/editing-tip-avoid-episodic-writing\/","title":{"rendered":"Editing Tip: avoid episodic writing"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>Episodic writing is inserting a scene that serves no other purpose than to add word count to a story. Remember, each scene should pull the reader further into the story&#8211;should make the reader loathe to put down the book. That means that each scene should either reveal something about our POV character or should take the plot\/conflict to the next level. If it does neither of these, the scene should be rewritten or cut completely.Let&#8217;s take a look at an example.<\/p>\n<p>Eg:<\/p>\n<p>The doorbell rang and Sarah rushed to the door. She opened it to find the pizza delivery boy on the doorstep. &#8220;Hi,&#8221; she said.<\/p>\n<p>&#8220;Hi,&#8221; he replied. He looked down at the box. &#8220;That will be twelve dollars, please.&#8221;<\/p>\n<p>Sarah, turned to get her purse from the table by the door. She pulled out her wallet and found a ten and two ones. Handing them to the delivery boy she said, &#8220;Thanks.&#8221;<\/p>\n<p>He handed her the pizza box and turned and walked to his car.<\/p>\n<p>You&#8217;ll notice, as a reader, you are not engaged by this exchange. Who cares about a pizza getting delivered? What does it have to do with the story? How does it advance the plot? What does it tell us about the characters? &#8230; the answer to those questions is No one and Nothing. This is a meaningless exchange. Filler.<\/p>\n<p>But let&#8217;s look at it fleshed out a little:<\/p>\n<p>Eg.<\/p>\n<p>The doorbell rang and Sarah rushed to the door. Hope guided her feet. Maybe Kyle really would come back. She opened the door and a&nbsp; pizza delivery boy held up a box. &#8220;Hi,&#8221; he said.<\/p>\n<p>&#8220;Hi.&#8221; The simple word choked her&#8211;or maybe it was the tears she swallowed. She should have known better than to think Kyle would come running back to her. Why would he? She didn&#8217;t deserve forgiveness.<\/p>\n<p>The pizza kid looked down at the box. &#8220;That will be twelve dollars, please.&#8221;<\/p>\n<p>Sarah stared at the box. Why had she ordered this pizza? She wasn&#8217;t hungry. Would probably never be hungry again. Kyle had taken her heart and her stomach&#8211;for food and for life.<\/p>\n<p>Oh, who was she kidding? This wasn&#8217;t Kyle&#8217;s fault. It was hers. She&#8217;d lied to him, not the other way around.<\/p>\n<p>&#8220;Ma&#8217;am?&#8221;<\/p>\n<p>She glanced up and then turned to get her purse from the table by the door. Hungry or not, she&#8217;d eat this pizza, wallow in self-pity, and maybe it would make her feel better. She handed the money to the delivery boy. &#8220;Thanks.&#8221;<\/p>\n<p>He handed her the pizza box and walked to his car.<\/p>\n<p>In this second example, there&#8217;s still not a lot going on. It&#8217;s still a scene about a pizza being delivered. But, we do learn something. We discover something about the character (her sorrow, her remorse, her tendency to wallow in self-pity) and we discover something about the conflict (she lied.) There is a purpose for the scene. Once we can clearly see the purpose for the scene, the next step is to &#8220;activate&#8221; as much as possible and to produce a deeper point-of-view&#8230;but that&#8217;s another lesson, entirely.<\/p>\n<p>Happy writing!<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>Episodic writing is inserting a scene that serves no other purpose than to add word count to a story. Remember, each scene should pull the reader further into the story&#8211;should make the reader loathe to put down the book. 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